10% in 10 Minutes
Do a word count on two pages. Now cut 10% of the words in 10 minutes. Every throat-clearing phrase, unnecessary adverb and adjective, flabby nominalization, and space-absorbing, unnecessary passive voice has got to go.
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Exercise
Stephen was asked to write a short comment for a legal magazine on life as a new lawyer. He needs to keep it under 300 words, but his first draft comes out at 373 words. He asks you to help edit.
Take 10 minutes and cut 10%. You don’t have to rewrite the article to make it perfect. Just help Stephen clear out the word clutter.
Remember the context, audience, and purpose; you want to keep the same tone and message. Stephen’s article is meant to be an entertaining, light–hearted comment on starting out in law and the audience will be colleagues at all levels and types of legal practice.
Here is the first draft
it is really difficult being an new lawyer .
First starting your legal practice is tough. I don’t know why it is called the practice of law when you, , have to get it right the first time, every time, , you can't just learn as you go. Would I need to play a Beethoven sonata perfectly the first time I see it? .
Seconding for the help they need. Sending bills becomes an onerous task because you have to justify and detailed explain every single thing you have done
, there are troubled clients. Most people you meet are pleasant , but a client is a person with a problem. And problems make people , anxious, . And they can take it out on you when things do not go well. Some clients are even not too happy about having to payNext, usually opposing lawyers are only trying to do their own jobs well. Even with the difficulties of building and maintaining a good reputation in the legal community, I believe that, as modeled by the best of our profession, if you play fair and don’t try to pull a fast one, you’ll be respected and enjoy collegial, relationships .
there is interacting with other lawyers, both new calls and senior practitioners. Some enjoy fighting, butAnd finally, there are the judges. I am intend to intimidate new lawyers. But it’s a final exam every time I stand up to make my case. . I know judges are too busy to remember when they were struggling first-timers, but I wonder if they can hear my knees knocking when I stand up to speak.
sure they do notI miss law school!
It is difficult being a new lawyer.
First, starting a legal practice is tough. I don’t know why it is called the practice of law when you have to get it right the first time, every time. You can't just learn as you go. Would I need to play a Beethoven sonata perfectly the first time I see it?
Second, there are troubled clients. Most people you meet are pleasant, but a client is a person with a problem. And problems make people anxious. And they can take it out on you when things do not go well. Some clients are not too happy paying for the help they need. Sending bills becomes an onerous task because you have to justify and explain every single thing you have done.
Next, there is interacting with other lawyers, both new calls and senior practitioners. Some enjoy fighting, but usually opposing lawyers are only trying to do their own jobs well. Even with the difficulties of building and maintaining a good reputation in the legal community, I believe that, as modeled by the best of our profession, if you play fair and don’t try to pull a fast one, you’ll be respected and enjoy collegial relationships.
And finally, there are the judges. I am sure they do not intend to intimidate new lawyers. But it’s a final exam every time I stand up to make my case. I know judges are too busy to remember when they were struggling first-timers, but I wonder if they can hear my knees knocking when I stand up to speak.
I miss law school!